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PROVING HUMAN
By Alexander Naumenko

GENRE: Action, Sci-fi
LOGLINE:

To live in peace a computer raised orphan declares war to an interstellar corporation creating a breakthrough military technology and chasing his spaceship for that technology component

SYNOPSIS:

An AI of the spaceship UNICORN raises a boy TEE on an uninhabited planet. Tee’s parents were killed by flying spherical droids. He keeps seeing that in his dreams. He has dark hair with noticeable presence of gray hair of which he is often reminded by the Unicorn.

Tee wants to leave the planet and to see other worlds. When he sees an artificial object descending on the planet, Tee wants to investigate that. The Unicorn advises against that as they may reveal themselves to those who killed the boy’s parents.

Upset with that decision the boy runs away and the ship starts engines to save him. Now they have to leave the planet, but they get under attack of similar droids. They destroy them but the ship gets damaged and the boy gets serious about the Unicorn’s warnings. Still, Tee decides to go to a paradise planet to have fun.

There he meets a couple of aliens SUN and CODA. They tell him about lottery draw at a weekly fare and their desire to get drawn to the same team. With the help of the Unicorn Tee arranges that, but it turns out ugly. He learns that now the planet is turned into a prison and teams get various challenges. He decides to help Sun and Coda in their challenge. But it is too hard and he evacuates their whole team from the planet except for Sun. It infuriates Coda and the whole team.

Leaving the planet they barely escape from military ships sent to intercept them. Now they arrive to a planet where the last rebels fight against mysterious Dark Matters. They help the rebels to win a small battle. The team arranges a meeting with the rebels’ leaders. It turns out to be a trap and Tee gets caught.

The Unicorn chased by the enemy ships led by Sun manages to rescue Tee. The team now stands for Tee. He can destroy the enemy ships, but decides to give Sun the second chance. He finds out about his grey hair connecting his brain with the Unicorn and amplifying it immensely. Tee decides to go to the central planet of the enemy.

There he finds out that Dark Matters stand for TARK MET ARS – the CEO of an interstellar corporation ruling the whole quadrant. And Tee is short for Tark. Sun is given an order to kill Tee, but disobeys. Using weaknesses in the corporation’s software the Unicorn helps Tee to win the battle, but the Unicorn is destroyed at the end.

Coda overcomes her suspicions and tells Tee about her feelings.

PROVING HUMAN

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Daniel South

Hi Alexander, Your essay on loglines was well done. I am looking forward to seeing your story and hopefully working together soon.

Alexander Naumenko

Hi Daniel, Thank you for kind feedback. Regarding cooperation - I am looking forward to it.

Daniel South

Hi Alexander,

I have started reading your script and am enjoying it. I will get back to you after I am done with any thoughts on it. Looks good.

Dan

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