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an overworked line cook and her thrill-seeking boyfriend partake in a psychological prison's escape room in a bid to help her dying father.
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Megan Weaver has been dating her boyfriend David Potter for six years. David is a thrill seeker who loves to spice things up in their relationship so no one gets bored of each other. Megan's father has been just diagnosed with cancer. Megan is really close with her dad, feeling the financial hardship of dealing with cancer in her family, she decides to work more hours. David hasn't spent too much with his girlfriend lately, feeling lonely he looks into ways to help Megan out with money. He spots an ad about a new game that pays 50k to the winner. The Past Life Experience, is a escape room unlike no other. Players are all hypnotized before playing, to awaken the spirit of their past life. Each player becomes who they were in their previous life except their appearance. Using their acquired knowledge they must find the way out of the building, they are trapped in. One player becomes Ivan the dismemberer, a serial killer named from their MO.
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Hi Tristan, while I love the concept, this reads more like a tagline for a one-sheet. Could I get a little more insight into the protagonist, the antagonist and the plot?
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Sure thing James, my logline is rough draft, I added it so I wouldn't forget anything. Megan Weaver has been dating her boyfriend David Potter for six years. David is a thrill seeker who loves to spice things up in their relationship so no one gets bored of each other. Megan's father has been just diagnosed with cancer. Megan is really close with her dad, feeling the financial hardship of dealing with cancer in her family, she decides to work more hours. David hasn't spent too much with his girlfriend lately, feeling lonely he looks into ways to help Megan out with money. He spots an ad about a new game that pays 50k to the winner. The Past Life Experience, is a escape room unlike no other. Players are all hypnotized before playing, to awaken the spirit of their past life. Each player becomes who they were in their previous life except their appearance. Using their acquired knowledge they must find the way out of the building, they are trapped in. One player becomes Ivan the dismemberer, a serial killer named from their MO.
In a bid to help her dying father, a down on her luck (profession) and her thrill-seeking boyfriend partake in a mysterious escape room. A dangerous, psychological prison known as The Past Life Experience.
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Thanks Frank, much better logline.
No problem, Tristan. Very interesting premise!
Funny thing is the idea came to me when I was adopting my astral vampire novel to a script.
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