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two orphans were made prostitutes by their father under the guise of a circus performance, they tried to forget their old home, but they (including their father) always returned there, whatever happened.
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Two orphans who became prostitutes by their own father under the guise of a circus tour around the city trying to forget their old home, a place where they were still close and do not hold grudges with each other for various selfish reasons.
But (also their father) they actually always return to that place in the end after experiencing various kinds of travel and adventure routes and different flavors.
In any case, they cannot change their true feelings towards their father in the midst of the rumors that their father killed their mother for playing fun with the governor, plus the crazy issue they believe to be true, that is the illegitimate child as a result of playing their mother and the governor. hidden in the old house, because when they were little, when they played handball they remembered meeting someone their age, wearing a white dress with a sincere smile returning their balls.
All that they believe in the midst of their habit of consuming heroin for their weary lives as prostitutes, especially those who employ them are their own fathers. They always think about his father's actions, the issue of their mother's infidelity and of course their home that always makes them come back.
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Your logline sounds like you're still fleshing the idea out to yourself. It starts off as a story that pulls you in, but then dissipates with a vague "whatever happens." We should know what it is that happens that draws them home.
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Yes, you are right. This is still a raw idea. I also do not know what the things in "Whatever happened", my idea for A Place is new that far and I have not yet developed, only just crossing my head. Thank you very much for the criticism.
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