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BLACK ICE (ADAPTATION)

BLACK ICE (ADAPTATION)
By Debbie Elicksen

GENRE: Sports, Drama
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A talented hockey player is at the mercy of an abusive hockey coach and must choose between his potential professional career or leave the sport.

SYNOPSIS:

Big event: assault

Goal: professional leagues

Secondary story: executives, trainer, townie – who learn the truth and feel powerless to stop the abuse.

Nate Rymer

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Nathaniel Baker

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Tasha Lewis

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Joshua Dinman

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Joshua Dinman

The only reason I didn’t give this five stars is that I want to know more! Who is the protagonist? How does his coach stay above that law? What gives the player the strength to make his ultimate decision? I may be wrong, but I think your synopsis needs to divulge more of the arc of the story.

Debbie Elicksen

Thank you Joshua Dinman! I appreciate the feedback. I will work on this task. :)

Leonardo Ramirez

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Marcel Nault Jr.

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Marcel Nault Jr.

I can imagine this as a "Whiplash"-like scenario where the coach breaks down his protégé to bring the best out of him... at first. However, his abusive nature gets the hold of him and decides to do something about it.

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