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EQUINOX

EQUINOX
By Caroline Osmont Patiño

GENRE: Drama
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Suffering no less than four miscarriages, thirty year-old Gioia Welsh finds herself trapped in a struggle between her dream of becoming a mother and the reality of her own body. Her mind travelling through guilt, resentment and anxiety, a special encounter is going to empower her: a horse.

Pete Dowd

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Pete Dowd

"Suffering no less than four miscarriages" sounds like you haven't decided how many she's actually had. Also knowing a little more about how she encounters the horse and what their relationship is like would strengthen it.

Caroline Osmont Patiño

Thank you very much will work on it :)

Wilmer Villanueva

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Stephen Carter

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Stephen Carter

Tighten it up. You have all the elements. Something like:

Gioia's dream of motherhood is jeopardized by her biological clock and the betrayal of her own body, but a chance encounter with a wild horse rescues her from the brink of suicide and helps her rediscover self-worth and purpose.

You get the idea. Good luck!

Caroline Osmont Patiño

Thank you Stephen, amazing job I love your logline :)

Nathaniel Baker

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