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ON A MISSION
By Jeffrey B. Wayne
“On a Mission” is about a female ex-special forces operator who fights hand-to-hand against gangsters holding hostage a kid with untapped special powers.
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Written for SPFX artists to try their special and monster FX. 4 Pages, 5 Characters, 1 location.
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Hi, Jeffrey. How are you?
How about this for a logline: "A woman fights hand-to-hand against gangsters holding hostage a kid with untapped special powers."
Is there an adjective you can put for the woman?
I think the other information can go in the synopsis section.
Also, you put the genres as Sci-Fi and Action, but the genres in the logline are Action and Horror.
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Maurice, thank you for the feedback! I've incorporated it.
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You're welcome, Jeffrey. The ex-special forces operator sounds better than woman.
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interesting. No need to mention it's an action sci-fi short.
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Thanks, Seth. I see your point. Since that information is contained in the drop downs, I updated my logline. Thanks!