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After a fatal incident makes him give up his dreams, a hockey prodigy gets a second chance to prove he’s a winner while learning to overcome his personal losses.
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“Last Shot” is “Rocky” meets “The Blind Side.” The story is about Sam, a former college hockey goalie prodigy who walked away from the game when his mentor, his father, passed away and Sam is left guilt ridden from his death. Left to take care of his ill mother and coaching youth hockey to make ends meet, Sam struggles to get by as he watches his former college friends now play professionally in the PHL, the Professional Hockey League. When Sam's best friend from college, Andrew, gets traded to the local PHL team, the two cross paths and Andrew gives Sam the chance to make extra money playing as an "emergency goalie." When Sam shows up, he is unexpectedly thrown into the game when the team's goalies get injured. Sam is thrust into saving the struggling team's season, while still saddled with the guilt of his father's passing and taking care of his ill mother. In its climax, Sam is faced with overcoming his college nemesis at the professional level, and trying to finally achieve his lifelong dream that he once left behind.
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Dwayne Roloson and I have had many discussions over the years. When he was in Calgary, he was up and down like a yoyo. Always considered a backup goalie, when he was under Jacques Lemaire's coaching genius in Minnesota, it was a two-goalie system and he was still a backup most of the time. He used to joke that his wife (a chemical engineer in oil and gas) made more money than he did in the NHL. Then something happened. He became the darling of the playoffs, and in Edmonton, he helped lead an 8th-place team into the Stanley Cup finals, albeit he was injured near the end.
Dallas Eakins was a journeyman player who spent more time in the minors than up. He ended up coaching the Oilers -- long after another journeyman player had led that team to five Stanley Cup wins (Glen Sather). So your script has a precedent. :)