GENRE: Comedy, Drama, Romance, Sci-fi
LOGLINE:
A socially awkward man finds friendship and love in the form of a female robot programmed to protect him even if that includes murder.
I was going to rate this a four, but was entered a five, and am currently unable to change that to a four.
I wanted to make you aware of that, and it is a good logline; There are many different ways that this could go, and the potential and possibilities of where they could go make it intriguing.
What John is trying to say is that your logline is not finished. "Where do we see 'the goal of the protagonist'? 'What' is he going to do about his predicament? This story is about "how' the man handles the situation of the female robot getting out of controle.
Jackie Letkowski With just a little more clarity, I think this would be a five. Does the man find friendship and love with a robot that is programmed to murder him?
I'd like to see the end product.
Thanks!
You're not too big on words.
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Dear Jackie Letkowski:
I was going to rate this a four, but was entered a five, and am currently unable to change that to a four.
I wanted to make you aware of that, and it is a good logline; There are many different ways that this could go, and the potential and possibilities of where they could go make it intriguing.
Congrats on what you have written.
God Bless.
Sincerely,
John German
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What John is trying to say is that your logline is not finished. "Where do we see 'the goal of the protagonist'? 'What' is he going to do about his predicament? This story is about "how' the man handles the situation of the female robot getting out of controle.
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Good call- I'll have to work on it some more. Thanks for your input! :)
Jackie Letkowski With just a little more clarity, I think this would be a five. Does the man find friendship and love with a robot that is programmed to murder him?
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