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After a botched heist, a getaway driver races against time to locate an abandoned winning lottery ticket worth millions that belonged to a hostage killed by his crew, all while confronting a corrupt parole officer and a vengeful gang member.
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The story is about SHAWN, a young man who dreams of a career in NASCAR. To prevent his brother-in-law, TED, from going to prison, Shawn reluctantly agrees to be the getaway driver in a bank robbery organized by Ted's friends, the brothers MILO and NOVA. During the heist, they pick up a female HOSTAGE, whom Shawn recognizes, but the hostage is tragically killed by Milo to evade the police. Overwhelmed by guilt, Shawn surrenders to the police, leading to the death of Milo as he tries to shoot Shawn. Nova, the surviving brother, vows to avenge his brother's death. After being released on early parole, Shawn tries to reconcile with his SISTER, who blames him for her husband's fate. He later discovers an unclaimed $28 million winning lottery ticket, which will expire in 30 days, was purchased from the same store where he briefly met the killed hostage in the lottery kiosk. Shawn believes the ticket belongs to the late hostage and seeks it with the help of the hostage's friend and colleague, LETICIA, who first condemns Shawn but eventually, after getting to know him, develops feelings for him. Shawn's corrupt parole officer, RICHMOND, learns about the ticket and tries to extort money from Shawn. Nova escapes from prison with Richmond's help to get the winning ticket from Shawn and seek revenge for his brother's death. After facing numerous challenges, including confrontations, murders, legal troubles, and strained relationships, Shawn wins and ultimately finds love with Leticia and redemption through his loved ones.
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Solid!
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It's a good start for a solid logline. But I'ts not clear who is the -protagonist- or -antagonist- here, Jeelan. I'm going for the bad guy being the lead character. I guess something you can only pull that off when, as at some point in his yourney, he's looking for some kind of redemption. Although, even here there are exceptions, like " The Killer."
The main question that's still not answered now is " What's the (antag.) force trying to stop him in achieving his goal? External: becoming rich. Internal: in conflict with external; does he want to sacrifise his (presious) conscious to get rich of the death if an other soul? Does remorse slowly creeps in. In real life, 99% of us would would sacrifise our conscious, but does our hero? This question answered satisfactory, in whatever way, is the only reason I would make the yourney all the way to the theater. I want to feel his internal struggle! Suffer with him!
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Rutger Oosterhoff I hear you, I made some changes to the logline and defined clearly the protag & antag. The lead (the getaway driver) is actually innocent of any crimes other than participating in the heist. Yes, he goes through the journey of redemption in the script and reaches the other side.
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