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In this tense revenge thriller, a terminally-ill killer serving a life sentence faces prison justice and a new cellmate who harbors a dark secret of his own.
SYNOPSIS:
Travis Rexfield is a convicted killer serving a life sentence as terminal cancer eats him alive. A lifelong criminal, he is given a medical transfer back to his old Maximum Security stomping grounds. Once a feared and powerful inmate, he is now targeted for death by the very convicts he once ruled. With no available beds, he is placed in a cell with Temo 'Venga' Veraz, a Latino gang member from his hometown. Who is this young man? What is his agenda, and what dark connection binds these two men?
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You may be right Meg. It's still very much a work in progress, so revisions are inevitable. But what do I know? I am also a rank amateur at this, by crikey. :)
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Technically the logline is a one sentence summary or broad description of the work, so Timothy's logline is a fair one, I would say!
Thanks Len! I appreciate the feedback, Meg & Tasha.
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Hi, Timothy Shireman. For a logline, you want something like: After ______ (something happens), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) must _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes).
The logline can be formatted differently than what I put, but the key parts are "after something happens," "the protagonist," "the goal," and "the stakes." You might want to add the antagonist in the logline also.
Example:
“Dog Treat Heist” (Animation/Comedy) After a group of dog criminals arrives in a small town, an impulsive dog sheriff must defend a dog treat factory so they won't steal food that's meant for hungry dog families.
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You're welcome, Meg Stone.
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