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When a lone biker, Joe Burke, arrives in North Bay, he sets in motion a dangerous game of chess
involving rival biker gangs, local police, covert intelligence officers, and unsuspecting locals, all while
keeping his true intentions hidden. Tensions rise and alliances shift as Joe strategically maneuvers his
pawns in a delicate game of vengeance, with the fate of the town hanging in the balance.
SYNOPSIS:
A Waitress, a Motel owner, Rival biker gangs, a no-nonsense cop, all unknowingly get caught in a game
of chess they’re not aware they’re the pieces of. Within minutes of arriving in the town of North Bay,
Ontario, a lone biker, Joe Burke, creates the spark for an already brewing Biker Gang war about to erupt.
a wrench thrown into the already rusty machine that is North Bay, joe covertly starts making the gangs
lose their edge, while keeping his true intentions to himself.
As other covert agents enter the scene investigating the disappearance of an informant, they become a
major player of the Chess board that only Joe is controlling.
while everyone is being played against each other, can anyone trust Joe as a friend or foe at this point?
who is melissa, and how has her death become the setting event for joe’s actions?
what is melissa’s connection to the gangs, joe, and the government agents?
where has joe been for the last 20 years, and what was he doing?
when did the split between the gangs happen, and what caused it?
Why is the cops, the motel owner, the waitress all a part of joe’s secretive plan? How is Joe going to
expose everyone and answer the question on everyone’s mind;
where is Melissa Tripp?
Only by following Joe will all the questions be answered. unfortunately, more questions will eventually
find their way to the surface
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Hi Rod, your concept has a lot of promise. Could you bring more conflict into your logline so the reader knows the stakes are stacked high against Joe Burke? May I suggest:
"Outrunning the PTSD that has plagued his life, former war hero-turned lawman Joe Burke tears out across the territories, leaving in his wake relief to those in need and a bloody reminder to those who make him angry."
I hope it helps!
Hey James
That's awesome, Thank You very much
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