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A BANKROBBER'S HANDBOOK

A BANKROBBER'S HANDBOOK
By Michael Howard

GENRE: Action, Crime
LOGLINE:

When a criminal book of intelligence is held for ransom by an insidious street gang, two local hoods rob banks to raise the capital and prevent the contents from ruining their lives and of their families.

SYNOPSIS:

A dying retired biker hands down a vital black book of practical, local criminal intelligence to his son Michael.

When a rival street gang brazenly takes it and holds it for ransom, Michael partners with a recently released convict Tom, who has vowed to avenge his father's drug deal gone wrong death.

Together they rob banks to raise the ransom and get the book back; Michael for reasons of respect, Tom to find out who is responsible for his father's murder.

When they finally confront the thieving gang leader Blaze, an unforgettable, surprising outcome is sure to surprise even the most cynical crime enthusiasts.

Jason Mirch

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Jason Mirch

Sounds like a fun premise and I love the two-handed angle. The tone isn't entirely clear to me from the logline or synopsis which is something you might work on. The idea of a guidebook for crime makes me think it is a somewhat more comedic premise but the way it is described seems much more gritty and straight forward action drama.

Michael Howard

Thank you Jason. I have received similar feedback and am reviewing the logline. The intent is gritty and straight forward action. Thanks for your feedback, it's well received and I am grateful for it.

Tasha Lewis

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Nathaniel Baker

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Maurice Vaughan

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Maurice Vaughan

Nice poster, Michael Howard. Did you make it?

Martin Reese

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Michael Howard

Thanks Maurice Vaughan , no, I used a Fiverr contributor. I tried originally to create my poster but failed miserably. Grateful for sites such as Fiverr where you can find talented graphic artists who will do great work for reasonable prices.

Michael Howard

And thank you Maurice Vaughan for rating my logline!

Michael Howard

Thank you Martin Reese for rating my logline. Any feedback on how I can make it better? I'm always looking to improve it, thanks!

Martin Reese

Hi Michael Howard maybe say: ...ruining their lives and their families'. Other than that I think the logline is good.

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Michael Howard. I hired an artist on Fiverr to design a poster for my feature script.

Thomas Pollart

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Michael Howard

Thanks for rating my logline, Thomas!

Nate Rymer

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Michael Howard

Thanks for rating my logline, Nate! I'm open to hearing what would make it a 5 star rating -- would you mind sharing your feedback?

Mista Martel

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Mista Martel

Great logline - The logline presents two clear protagonists if you will who are forced to take action to save their lives and the lives of their families. This helps the audience identify with the characters and understand their motivations. It also creates a clear sense of conflict and raises the stakes even higher.

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