This is a good job. I might consider changing the term "race against the clock" to just "race against time", since this is a period piece and clocks in their conventional form didn't exist in ancient Egypt; but time is universal. Also consider changing confront to battle, since it implies a confrontation and is more actionable. And clarify who is aided by the fallen deity, the Princess or the Goddess? For example: "Aided by a fallen deity, an Ancient Egyptian Princess is in a race against time to defeat an immortal Goddess whose plagued her with a curse." This might not fit your story, but you get The Who, What, Where, and Why - to entice the reader to want to learn the how, by raising the stakes. How will she defeat an immortal Goddess? That seems impossible. Perhaps with the deity's help? Let's find out. Good luck!

Jon Navarro Thank you for this feedback! I very much appreciate the insight and deep thought! You make so many great points! I will be sure to edit accordingly!