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After the arrival of a mysterious guest at a remote hotel, new night receptionist finds herself embroiled within a nightmare scenario when she discovers he is an alleged murderer on the run from police.
SYNOPSIS:
A 16th Century guest house on the edge of town, a murderer hunted by the police and a young receptionist unlucky enough to find herself in the wrong place at the wrong time at Hallowe’en...
Madeline Norman is the new receptionist at the Hangman Inn, a creepy Elizabethan inn with an uncomfortable history. She is set to have a long, tedious night ahead of her after Ria, the landlady, leaves on a date and with the elusive Mr. Brown the only guest registered.
This changes, however, when the charismatic and secretive American, Vincent Blythe, arrives. When Madeline discovers that he is a drug smuggler and alleged murderer on the run from the police, she seeks the help of Gene, an off-duty detective patronizing the bar. Gene, however, is also a drunk and finds Madeleine irresistible. But when he assaults her it is Vincent who comes to the rescue and a fight ensues between the two men resulting in Gene’s 'accidental' death.
Surprised that Vincent encourages her to phone for the police, Madeleine attempts to do so, only to discover the telephone cable is cut and her cell phone unaccountably missing.
But this is just the beginning... the night is still young. As each layer of the plot tantalizingly unfolds, more questions are raised and Madeline finds herself embroiled deeper within a nightmare scenario with no clear means of escape. As she increasingly becomes drawn to Vincent, she begins to truly believe he is not the murderer he is accused of being.
From an eerie West Country inn to a lavish London hotel, The Inn at Hangman’s Hollow is at once sexy and dramatic, atmospheric and eerie with a complex cast of characters who cross the boundaries between fear and manipulation, suspicion and greed.
Hi, Caroline Spence. We don't get enough from the logline to know what the story is about.
For a logline, you want something like: "After ______ (something happens/the inciting incident), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes)."
Loglines are one or two sentences. You can add the antagonist in the logline. The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline.
Example #1:
"After a group of dog criminals arrives in a small town, an impulsive dog sheriff defends a dog treat factory so they won't steal food that's meant for hungry dog families."
Example #2:
"A dysfunctional couple works together to survive against bears after they crash on an abandoned road miles from help."
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Hey Maurice Vaughan - thanks for your comment. Yes it is a bit brief - I shall review!
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Hi again Maurice Vaughan - do you know if there's a way to edit loglines, etc? I can't see anything that says I can...
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You're welcome, Caroline Spence. If you go to the logline section of your page, there's a green button to the right of your project/logline. You can edit your logline by clicking that button.
You can also edit your logline by clicking the poster of your project/logline (in the logline section of your page), then clicking the arrow button to the right of "Caroline Spence posted a screenplay" (toward the top of the page).
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Thank you so much, Maurice Vaughan - I shall give it a go!
You're welcome, Caroline Spence.
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