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De and mamas boy had a good run.de was always the calm business man and mamas boy was the wild one.once mamas boy got killed de went against everything he believed in as far as war bring police and slow up the money,but he didn’t care.de just want revenge on who had the balls to kill his best friend mommas boy.de realized mamas boy missing because they was supposed to meet up that morning with unk together,but mamas boy was a know show and that wasn’t like him.de went to mommas boy house and realized when he knocked on the door it was cracked open.de pulled his gun out and went inside the house.de heard noises coming from the basement so he checked it out.de found mamas boy tied up to a chair barely breathing.mamas boy tried to tell de who beat and shot him,but ended up passing away.de started looking for answers even from his own circle. .mamas boy older brother jimmy who went to jail back in the day, after he got pulled over with 30 keys in the trunk of his car.de was surprised when he seen jimmy show up to the funeral.de didn’t know jimmy came home.mamas boy never said a thing.de thought jimmy was never getting out of jail after getting caught with that type of weight,but de was happy to see jimmy.he needed someone he can trust after losing his best friend.they didn’t waste time tryna figure out who killed mamas boy together.business didn’t stop, after de got shot at a red light,waking up in the hospital handcuffed to the bed.with a cop sitting there watching him.a cartel boss named gordo from Puerto Rico got de out the hospital and his law problems for something in return,that’s gonna change De’s life forever.after comforting associates, enemies and even two dirty cops named Batman and robin.de ended up finding some answers to his friends death.coming face to face with his best friends killer.de couldn’t believe who crossed who it was.
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Hello, Marlen Bell . Your concept is very intriguing, but the logline is too long, more like a synopsis. Here's a suggestion, 'After two boys from a harsh neighborhood grow to become powerful figures in the organized crime, they face the traps of such life, until one of them is found dead, and the other will stop at nothing to find his friend's killer.'
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