Hello my name is Dartanyan Adkins with a High-Flying script that will put you in the cockpit with an Old
Airforce Veteren Pilot that uses America's greatest Bombers ever built to rescue his love one
LOGLINE:
A former US veteran air force pilot embarks on a dangerous mission using an old museum decommissioned B17 airplane bomber to rescue his captured grandson who was shot down in Russian territory.
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Is this a ruse? ;)
Redundancies. Former and veteran. Old, museum and decommissioned. Airplane and bomber.
When his grandson is captured after being shot down over Russia, a former Air Force pilot flies a daring rescue mission in a decommissioned B-17 bomber.
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WHAT! A RUSE? EXPLAIN YOUR QUESTION, IF YOU CAN ARTICULATE IT.
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WHY ARE YOU YELLING?!
Of course I can: https://www.stage32.com/lounge/introduce_yourself/Comedy-Script-8
You're welcome. I enjoy helping members improve their loglines and correct errors.
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NO ONE ASK FOR YOUR HELP! AND NO THANK YOU!
YOU'RE SHOUTING AGAIN!!!
Most are grateful when egregiously incorrect usage is corrected. They then don't look bad when trying to capture the attention of professionals who might be in the position to buy a screenplay. If you think this is tough, wait until you deal with producers... who know correct usage. Pride in being woefully wrong is done at one's peril.
It's standard for loglines to be picked apart here. It's a public forum. And a community.
You're welcome.
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My uncle Walter was a belly gunner in a B-17 over Berlin during the war. He said they were always fed the best meals because they knew it would most likely be their last meal. The German fighters looked like black streaks they were so fast. All you could see were the light beams shining through the countless bullet holes in the fuselage.
AGAIN, BIRD-BRAIN, WHO ASK YOU FOR YOUR FEEDBACK?
Let me help you, E LAME. IF I MADE A POST ASKING FOR FEED BACK ON MY LOGLINE, THEN YOUR
FEEDBACK, ADVICE, SUGGESTUON OR TIP WOULD BE MUCH APPRECIATED, BUT I DIDN"T. NOW
ARE WE ON THE SAME PLANET?
Hi, Dartanyan Adkins and E Langley. You didn't ask for feedback/advice/etc., Dartanyan, and I understand that, but E was trying to help. Let's keep it positive and professional. And please don't name-call, Dartanyan.
Apparently, this woman has some control issues. If one tells you he or she don't want your feedback, then leave it alone and go about your business. But if you read her replies, she apparently couldn't let it go. She is not a VETTED screenwriter, HASN'T produced ANYTHING or even have an OPTION for work? Why would I want her help, let alone ask for it? But okay, Maurice
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Chill, Dude.
There's nothing in the posts stating don't offer feedback.
Why? Because I know the difference between rouse and ruse.
You're welcome.
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I want to be the tail gunner.