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SYNOPSIS:
Year 2090. Matt Gray, a leading billionaire in the area of robotics, suffers the loss of his wife from a car accident after having a strong argument with her. It is isolated from the world on an artificial island in the middle of the ocean where it lives only with its androids.
Andrew Wilson, the CEO in charge of the Matt Corporation, after finding that the company is going through an economic crisis, decides to bring Matt back or force him to resign and sell his shares. To convince him, they try to assess his mental state by sending a young intern; Jake, robot programming expert, and an android; Winie, programmed in the area of psychology for her to determine her mental health.
Matt enrages the decision and is frustrated against the android Winie. She proceeds with the evaluation anyway, and little by little, she begins to have more intimate contact with him, to such an extent that Matt falls in love with her. This causes a series of events that harm the company's actions. The shareholders, in a desperate attempt, decide to take it out at any cost, sending a group of tactical androids to take care of them generating a violent battle on the island with a tragic end.
Robotika is a screenplay similar to EX-MACHINA or Artificial Intelligence or Bicentennial Man, which tries to explain human behavior in a machine.
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Thanks, Vivek and Nathaniel
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A Fascinating premise and a really good story!!!
Thanks William!
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Thanks Ben!
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Perfection!
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Thanks... Arthur and Juno!
Thanks Mr. Lance!
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Thanks Chantel!
Thanks Erick, you are very kind to say so
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It sounds to me like a futuristic version of classical movies/books like "The Invention of Morel" or "Forbidden Planet". Great concept!
Thanks Carlos
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Reading the logline and synopsis made me want more, I was disappointed there was no screenplay to read - personally, Wilmer, I wasn't convinced with your logline ending, "to assess his mental health" - too tame - I would prefer you suggest some sexual tension as in the female-looking robot was sent to "persuade him to return". Cheers.
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I think the word order of the logline could be re-jigged for an easier read. It felt like information was leapfrogging itself. My attempt for you:
Following the death of his wife, a robotics tycoon isolates himself on an island to grieve. His concerned corporation send a female android to retrieve him but instead they fall in love putting the company in jeopardy
It's a cool premise, I must say though, it has eerily similar vibes to Ex-Machina. If you haven't seen it, check it out and maybe think about what sets your story apart from it?
Thanks Channel for your notes. They are always well received.
Thanks Adam, I like logline better as you put it.
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What's the jeopardy?
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just reading the synopsis, I can see the act structure so clearly- I thought of Ex Machina too. Intrigued by these 'tactical android'- have a Terminator Salvation type scene in my head, but I'm sure it's much more subtle than that.
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I liked it, also. It sort of reminds me of a twilight zone episode where a prisoner is shipped to a deserted planet as punishment, however, they send him a female robot to keep him company. It’s called, THE LONELY.” Not your story, but good 1/2 hour of your time worth watching? :-)
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