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Seeking to usher in the new breed of rock-and-roll hitmakers, a songwriter-manager-record producer and a record-store clerk unite to start their own music-publishing company in 1959 New York City.
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It's Wednesday, February 4, 1959, and 25-year-old songwriter-manager-record producer KIRBY MCCULLUM strolls the music district in her native New York City. Sarcastic Kirby ends her tour at the Amalgamated Records store at 55th and Broadway...the store that employs a clerk named PENNY STAVROS, a 26-year-old Los Angeles native with a cheerleader's enthusiasm.
News about the previous day's Clear Lake, Iowa plane crash that claimed Buddy Holly, Ritchie Valens, and J.P. "The Big Bopper" Richardson tests Penny's enthusiasm...yet gives her and Kirby the impetus to start their own music-publishing company, to help all those remaining rock-and-roll acts out there.
After drafting a "Can you write the next Top Ten smash?" ad that appears in The New York Times as well as Variety, Kirby and Penny hold an organizational meeting at Penny's rented house in Queens...and land their first prospect: Tennessee-born DULCEY MAE WEATHERALL, a polite-and-optimistic singer-songwriter who initially mistakes Kirby as Penny's maid.
As the threesome straighten relationships out, nine more hopefuls arrive...chief among them the New York-born husband-and-wife team of SYLVIA THOMPKINS and HANK LEE, a hard-working recording artist and content-to-be-in-the-background manager, respectively; COLLEEN FITZPATRICK, a shy Chicagoan who becomes Dulcey Mae's partner; and a pair of collegians: Los Angeles-born worry wart MARTHA FANUCCHI and Chicago-born intellectual EVE REICH.
Once the dozen candidates pair up, Eve suggests they meet at the Journalism Building at Columbia University...but it doesn't work out. Neither does Penny's and Kirby's attempt to seek financing for a permanent space in Manhattan.
So Penny decides to set up the new Coast to Coast Music Publishing Company at her house.
With every space in Penny's abode except the kitchen and the bathroom now equipped with an old piano, the six teams- especially basement duos Eve and Martha, uninhibited Coloradan FLORENCE PEAKS and witty North Carolinian JOHNNIELOUISE HILL, and worldly JEANNIE ARCHAMBAULT and brassy fellow New Yorker ROSE KLEINSCHMITT- find the going rough to make it all work out.
When Jeannie's singing overpowers the other basement teams' efforts, Martha gives the company's founders an ultimatum: "If you don't do something about this, Eve and I will quit."
Kirby and Penny turn into do-it-yourselfers to put walls in the basement...and get the six basement writers to help out.
The writers can't convince record-industry leaders to take Coast to Coast's first batch of songs...but a ray of hope emerges when Kirby successfully woos THE DOO-WOPPERS, a street-corner singing group she admires...and Sylvia and Hank invite the group to one of Sylvia's recording sessions.
All it gets Penny is a visit from HER NEIGHBORS...who urge her to move out of that otherwise quiet neighborhood in Queens.
After three months in business, all Kirby, Penny, and Co. have to show for their efforts is the Doo-Woppers' first single, "You Knock Me Out," written by Hank and Sylvia...so the two founders call a meeting right after Sylvia's May 9 appearance at the Roseland Ballroom. The mission: Set up an event called "The Jingle Belles Revue," where the writers, the Doo-Woppers, and another of Kirby's discoveries, THE NINETY EIGHTS, perform Coast to Coast material.
Penny rents the New York Paramount Theater, and the event takes place June 7. The event almost backfires: The writers barely draw the 1,000 fans needed to avoid a $500 fee.
The revue's a success...but when Penny gets home, she finds her house festooned with graffiti.
Result: The tunesmiths and the Doo-Woppers team up to confront Penny's neighbors...the very authors of the graffiti. And after a heated discussion, the factions make peace with each other.
Plus: Penny gets to keep living in her rented house.
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Nice. Love the concept. However, I'm not sure about starting your logline with a prepositional phrase.
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Brian, thanks for your comments! (And thank you and Chaun for the ratings!)
I saw "American Hot Wax" when it was on TV. (Loved it so much that when I also found it on YouTube, I downloaded it onto my computer.)
Thanks so much for everything!
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LOVE IT!!!!!!
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Man, thanks, Nathaniel!!
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Arthur, thanks a bunch!
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Instead of "help the new breed..." - how 'bout "usher in the new breed" Jim
Replace the word "help" with "usher in"
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Brian, thanks for the tip! I just got through replacing "help" with "usher in!"
Tracy and Lance, thanks for rating!
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Thanks for the rating, Mista! All the VERY BEST to you!
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Love this! Gifted writer! 5 stars
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Leah and BL, thanks for checking out "Jingle Belles!" (And I apologize for not writing you both sooner!)
Wishing you two all the VERY BEST!
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Great, nice and short Logline!
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Carlv and Grzegorz, thanks for reading (and rating) "Jingle Belles!" Wishing you both all the VERY BEST!
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Melanie, Nate, and Constantin, thanks a bunch for rating "Jingle Belles!" All the VERY BEST to you!
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Tasha, thanks for checking out "Jingle Belles!" Wishing you all the VERY BEST!
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Gen and Seth, thanks for rating "Jingle Belles!" All the VERY BEST to you!
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Thomas, thanks a bunch for the "Jingle Belles" rating...and here's wishing all the VERY BEST to you!
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Nate, thanks a bunch for checking out "Jingle Belles!" Here's wishing you all the VERY BEST!
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John, thanks for rating "Jingle Belles!" And I wish you all the VERY BEST!
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Like your concept! I would add the battle between the groups to the logline to up the stakes and bring more urgency to the story!
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Maria, thanks for the tip...I'll see what I can do! (And here's wishing you all the VERY BEST!)
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Robin, thanks so very much for putting "Jingle Belles" to the test...and here's wishing you all the VERY BEST!
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Colin and Ashley, thanks for checking out "Jingle Belles!" Here's wishing you both all the VERY BEST!
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I love the concept - I'm a huge fan of music movies. I hope this gets made.
Wendy, thanks bunches for the compliment (the rating, too)...and here's wishing you all the VERY BEST!
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Grant, thanks a million for rating "Jingle Belles!" Here's wishing you all the VERY BEST!
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Maurice and Michael, thanks bunches for checking out "Jingle Belles!" Glad you're both here on Stage 32!