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CARROT SURVIVOR
By Onwukwe Abraham Ogonna

GENRE: Animation
LOGLINE: After a grandfather plants cabbage, cucumber, and carrot seeds to teach his grandson about the plant life cycle, the three veggies embark on a perilous journey through the soil world beneath, facing treacherous pests and diseases that threaten to destroy their fruits if they fail to overcome them.

SYNOPSIS:

PLANT LIFE CYCLE.

CARROT SURVIVOR

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Nathaniel Baker

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Onwukwe Abraham Ogonna

Thank you.

Angela Cristantello

Well, this sounds like a LOT of fun! I do, however, think that the storytelling in the logline itself could be a touch clearer. For example: what is a "transplant vegetable"? It sounds hysterical and clever, but, it's just important that we have a clear understanding of who our protagonist/protagonistS is.

And "survive the journey" as in these veggies are going somewhere? If so, where? Or is this just the journey of life?

And I think it'd be helpful to have a clearer idea as to what the inciting incident is, like what's THE event that gets this story going? Is it the moment that they're all infected with this terrible veggie disease, or something else?

Either way, this is a REALLY really fun start, and I'm sending you a DM that might be able to help you out :)

Onwukwe Abraham Ogonna

Angela Cristantello They have a journey. I can send the script to you to write. The script is unique n very fun. An adult can still watch it n learn a lot from it. It's educative, informative n entertaining both for children n adult.

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