Thank you all for the rates.

I'm liking this a lot. Don't know what the dialog is like, but you got my attention, but then, I was raised on westerns...not the psychological junk ones, but Ghost Riders in the Sky ones.

Oh yes, Jenean, I'm Brazilian, but I'm also a big fan of western movies. Thank you for your kind words.

Read the first 6 pages Marcos. A lot of dialog in that 6 page first scene. But the dialog is promissing and the short action sequence too Still, from here I guess things have to spead up, shorter scenes, less dialog and more action. Than again, just an opinion.

Hello Rutger. Actually, this is a short story, the intention is to start and end in these 6 pages. However, now that you mentioned, it's an interesting idea to try to develop it into a feature. Thank you for your comments!

This is a core situation, rather than a drama. It hits a number of the Western tropes. The story Cowpoke 2 tells should be acted out in present screen time. That is where the drama lies, of course. This is where you could mine the visual and emotional material, rather than a static image of two cowboys talking on horseback. Develop the story he tells and the characters in his story. You have presented telling, rather than showing a story. Please develop this further. I would read the next draft if that were offered.

Dry and brutal, just like the place this story takes place in. I can imagine putting this on my western watchlist.

Thank you, Omid!