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ADAM AND THE ALIENS
By Nathaniel Baker
A close encounter with a likable robot from another solar system leads to a star-crossed friendship and an impossible intergalactic mission to save the robot’s friends— despite overwhelming odds.
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Adam and the Aliens
Synopsis
Act 1:
An aspiring astronaut, Young Judy (8) plays in her room when she hears her baby sister Maria (1) crying. With parents asleep, Judy brings Maria to her room. Suddenly, a large alien, called the Red King, flies across the night sky. Judy sees it and takes Maria outside to inspect it. While standing on the yard, a red beam shoots down from the Red King and pulls Maria up. Judy is unable to stop it and when the alien spaceship takes off, Judy realizes they have taken Maria.
Nearly three decades later. A UFO crashes onto Earth outside Judy's (now late 30s) house. Judy's 8-year-old son, Adam, sees the raising purple smoke from the crash site but doesn't think much of it. Later that night, Adam is woken up by a noise from the garage. He goes to investigate when he sees a mysterious blue object in the garage. To Adam's great surprise, the object can speak and tells Adam his name is Rio. Scared, Adam runs away.
The next day, Adam is in the school playground when he is suddenly pushed over by three bullies: Sam, Tom, and the ringleader Jack. The boys steal Adam's favorite toy, Speedy, before Adam realizes what happened. Later that day, Adam cries in his bed. Rio hears his cries and enters the room, hoping to help Adam. After the initial shock, Adam gathers his courage to talk to Rio and tells him about Speedy.
Act 2:
The next day, Adam and Rio track Speedy to the park. Using Rio’s ability to fly and become invisible, Adam and Rio track the bullies down to their treehouse. Jack is shocked when Adam suddenly appears from nowhere and loses his balance. When Jack is about to fall, Adam leaps to rescue and saves him. Grateful Jack gives Speedy back to Adam. Adam and Rio return home when Rio receives a distress signal from one of his missing friends. That night, Rio and Adam look for a wifi router in Adam's garage when a blue blob flies towards them. Adam nearly screams when Rio recognizes it as his friend Max-e-o-e.
Rio uses the wifi router to communicate with his friends and tracks them down to Tokyo. He and Adam fly to Japan while Max-eo-e stays home and pretends to be Adam.
Rio and Adam track down Rio's friends -- Henry, Logan, and Miles –- to the harbor. But they soon realize, the entire thing was a trap. Now under the influence of a mysterious device that drains their energy. Rio is too weak to fight. It is now up to Adam to save everyone. Adam finds the device and deactivates it, giving the aliens their power back.
Adam and the aliens return to Adam's house while back in Tokyo, the Red King finds out about the aliens escaping. However, his accomplice, the Red Queen, reveals she has tracked Rio to North America.
The next day, Adam and the aliens try to repair their spaceship when Jack appears to apologize. Jack sees the aliens and Adam convinces him they are friendly. Things get worse when Judy comes home. Adam and Jack try to keep Judy from finding out about the aliens but ultimately fail.
Meanwhile, Miles and Logan work on fixing the ship when they are attacked by the Red King's army. With the Red King closing in, the aliens realize they need everyone's help in conquering the army. Just then, the Red Queen arrives. To Judy's great surprise she recognizes her, realizing she is now grown-up Maria. Red Queen denies all knowledge of Maria and kidnaps Judy.
Act 3:
The Red King attacks the city with his minions, trying to capture the aliens. Meanwhile, in the Red Queen’s spaceship, Judy wakes up and warns the Red Queen that her nephew Adam is in danger. The Red Queen doesn't believe Judy until she shows her a diamond-shaped birthmark she knows Maria also has. Seeing the birthmark brings back all the memories and Red Queen/Maria promises to help conquer her kidnapper, the Red King.
Meanwhile, Henry flies back to Tokyo and steals the mysterious device that can drain the aliens' energy. He returns to his friends, and they are joined by Judy and Maria. Adam and Jack distract the Red King while Maria fights him. But the Red King is too powerful and disarms Maria who falls to the ground only to be saved by Max-e-o-e.
Meanwhile, Rio asks Logan and Miles to catapult him towards the Red King. Once inside the Red King’s body, Rio turns on the device, sacrificing himself and causing the Red King to explode. With Red King and his army conquered, the aliens gather around Rio's lifeless body. Suddenly, Rio wakes up, making a full recovery. They all return to Adam's house, where they all take a ride in Maria's spaceship to celebrate their newfound friendship.
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How about: "When a friendly alien crash lands in Adam's backyard ... " Just to make it a bit shorter. Is there a bad guy, or antagonist?
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Cool idea! Very 'Heinlein-esque' in tone and concept. Great premise!
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Great concept.
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It's a really visual, exciting idea.
My big observations are:
Most people don't remember anything from when they were 1.
You've got a lot of trauma to resolve very quickly at the beginning of Act 3 before Maria and Judy can work together.
It seems to be Alex's story until it switches to Judy's after halfway through and then it's Rio that self-sacrifices at the end, so how anyone is changed by the arc might need some clarification.
I enjoyed reading it and imagined the story as an action-packed, animated delight!!!!
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Over a thousand views? Has anyone jumped on this yet? It sounds good!
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Incredible Work
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Love it! Is the music on the website part of the soundtrack?
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Engaging story,!
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Original.
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I loved your logline and really enjoyed the premise of your story. Fun characters, fun story all ending in a memorable and rewarding Act 3
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Reading the synopsis, I felt I'd watched a great CGI movie.
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I share Shahriar Bourbour's suggestion.
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Not really into family genres, but, "Adam And The Aliens" has pulled me in, reminding me of those awesome after-school TV programs, I can't wait to watch when I'm sitting there with my cold cereal fill of Cap'n Crunch.
Excellent Logline and Synopsis!
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What´s at stake? Are the stakes high enough? Where´s the comedy?
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I want to rent this now!
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There's not much of a story here - just things happening. Perhaps the real story is trying to find out what happened to Maria.
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Read your synopsis. Great concept. very visual. It seems to be a story about Alex before switching to Judy. would be good to find out the character arcs. I'm sure the script will reveal this.
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This is really good
I hope you add something the adults who have to watch this film, will enjoy
I would give this log line line 4 stars but I'm new here and can't find the stars
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Great concept that deliver a different spin on animated alien stories.
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Well, I usually don't go with the crowd, but I gotta agree with the 5 star reviews. Very imaginative and endless possibilities. I Love Epic type films. I think scripts where it is just two people talking and experiencing life is no good, unless it's written by Tarantino. So, I love that yours takes place on other worlds and galaxies with aliens and robots...battles....Japan....information overload is good nowdays. Twenty-five years ago Films had an average of 150 cuts, now days they have 1,500 cuts, so the bigger the better!!! God bless : )
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I too see much in your story, Nathaniel, is indeed promising. Without reading your synopses and only having read your logline: I wonder with: WHO is it that leads and connects ?
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Sounds like something my children would enjoy.
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I think you could take away the Bot side, and make it a real thing, and it would grab the audience more? I Hear Bot and think.. its likely done at the end. If it was a greater being, it might know more.. it would have truer feelings, it would have ways it solves problems that the characters are more narrow minded. . I feel it would relate more to a child watching the film, if it was a "being". Its a cool premise, to me it just lacks a little heart it could scoop back up with being more real.
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Really strong logline :)
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it's just a format on the paper stories blend more then this... I feel act 1 doesn't have any real stakes at the end... I think that's the main problem if any
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Bravo, Nathaniel. Good luck on the rest of your screenplays.
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